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accusations, dangling, feather, glistening, haikus, haunting, heartache, homesickness, inevitable, jack collom, jeopardize, lingering, lune, pace, picture, poem, scent, severe, shadows, smiling, speculations, touch
This is my first attempt at a fixed-form variant haiku created by Jack Collom, called LUNE! It is measured in words rather than syllables and is free from all constraints associated with haiku, thus need not contain kigo (season-word), kire (cut), may rhyme and may use all other poetic devices. The form is 3/5/3 words.
(As per Wikipedia)
*Fingers Crossed*
Our feet dangling
In the ice cold water
Glistening in sunlight
Speculations and accusations
Threaten to jeopardize strong relationships
Even destroy them
Inevitable bouts of
Homesickness and anxiety arise, causing
Painfully severe heartache
If only his,
Feather touch and fragrant scent lingered, a
Dream come true
The dark shadows
Fall in step with me
My pace quickens
Her smiling face
Haunting, everlasting, may her soul
Rest in peace
Mind explaining the title?
Wiki and me dont really go hand-in-hand :P
Your words carry a certain beauty…that embraces the mind, letting it dream and embrace your words in return! very beautifully written!
Thanks a lot Sir ! :)
I like the way you’ve used images too, Sanah. Is this really your first attempt at Haiku? Well done you :)
I want to let you know, Sanah, that I’ve created a new page on my blog called ‘Awards’ and that I’ve linked to you there – and nominated you for all of them – Polly x
I’m honored ! Thank you Ma’am ! :)
A very good attempt drawing great imagery! I liked it!
Yay, looks like my first attempt went well ! :D
Indeed it did! : )