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being strong, diminishing passion, emotionally dependent, forgiveness, friends, hurt, pain, running away, suffocation
Scrutiny in your eyes
Tracking my every move
You’re a stranger in disguise
Speaking in tones of gentle reproof.
My life doesn’t feel like my own
With you breathing down my neck
Every passing second
You’re aware of all my flaws
Your pure obsession
Gnaws
At my conscience
I do not need your guidance
To understand life’s essence.
You’re draining me emotionally
Trying to light the bridges you burnt
Forcing me to emerge as the stronger one
You’ve left me in a daze and undone.
You’re hurting inside
Choking me with your words
Berating yourself
Pushing me downwards
Asking for forgiveness
Apologizing too much
Throwing your life away
You see the year old memories replay
In your dreams, every day.
You’re running away
You’re drifting somewhere.
You’re down in the dumps
The burning passion in you long gone
You’re living in the past
Tired of being trampled on and a social outcast.
I wish you would move on
And let go of the pain
you’ve held inside for so long
So I can finally stop feeling this way
And even though we would remain friends
It’ll never be the same again. .
This is for YOU. Thank you for your unconditional love. But sadly, too much of anything is bad. I’d never ever forget you. :)
Strong verse. I know this feeling. I use to tell my ex husband that his chastising of himself before I could vent my anger at his actions was stealing my right to be angry, therefore, the stanza that goes
“You’re hurting inside
Choking me with your words
Berating yourself
Pushing me downwards”
really resonated with me.
Exactly. Before I could tell him how angry I was with him, he would say hurtful things about himself. Thankfully, as friends, he doesn’t do that anymore.
I hope you and your Ex are on good terms ! :)
Unless that guy won’t “move on” in the inside, his love would remain the best you could possibly get in a lifetime. though many things add to the entity of true love, by what your poem says, his love is kind of that..
maybe instead you should ask him to “let you move on..” as u are apologizing too with kindness, he will understand that. if u ask “you move on”. that may hit him like a poisoned arrow to the heart.
I would be interested to know about that guy, coz I see and understand so much from my daily life. I kind of form theories on humans, especially boys,men..coz of the constant intervention of “love”…many men fake it.. later accuse the woman for the breakup..and they move on.. if love is true, then moving on is as much impossible.
Just felt something after reading the post, no offense please. sorry for that anyway..
Don’t say sorry for expressing your views ! None taken, Shankar ! Let me tell you something about the guy I wrote this for. He, indeed is one of a kind. Our relationship did not last more than a month or so, but he always approached me in his own subtle way. Boyfriends came and went, but THIS guy was ALWAYS by my side. A shoulder to cry on, a hand to hold. Believe it or not, it’s almost been a year since we broke up but he says he still loves me. Now am I not a lucky girl to have someone like that in my life ? After he read the poem I expected a remark but instead he praised my writing abilities. He’s a wonderful guy. And someone I’d never forget. :)
And of course, I’d love to see more of your work.
Keep writing.
That is what i was trying to tell.. see, he doesn’t feel bad about u saying so. yes, that’s good.. that was what i was suggesting you. :) that, he is one who is letting u have ur way..
nyway.. gud luck.gud life.
and your bottled sentiments are good to read, for me. :)
How sweet. Thank you. :)
Beautiful. wonderfully captured…
Thank you so much !
Really appreciate it. :)
I’ve been that guy before. Sometimes its so hard to let go. I enjoyed this poem very much.
Agreed. I made the guy I wrote this for read it. He said he got the message and really liked the poem. Even if we aren’t in a r’ship now, I can proudly say we’re good friends. :)
Hi. I was awarded the Liebster Blog Award, and you were one of the five blogs I wished to pass the award along to! You can read more about it on my blog.
~ Sirenia ~
I’m honoured Sirenia. Thanks a lot. :)
I have nominated you for the award please have a look as given below; http://justsimplyinlove.wordpress.com/2011/11/19/the-liebster-blog-award/
Thank you
Regards,
Zahir
Thanks a ton Zahir ! :)
You are welcome, Ton is a lot Sana ;p
So beautiful. Been down that road before and more than happy not to be there anymore
Good for you. Space is very imp in every relationship.
Thank you. Looking forward to reading more of your poems. :)
i will never forget this artwork. I’m lost in this ecstasy.. ‘wow’ is the most appropriate word to it.
Thank you Guneet ! :)
i have started giving voice to my poems.. this is one.. i have done that to some shayaries written by me too.. hope u like it
What a brilliant idea guneet. This way you can share it with the world.
I suggest you do this with all your poems and upload it. :D
he he.. i thought of that.. but thats a tiring job and um quite lazy to do such stuff :P
but the ones I’ll write from now on will be posted as videos too.
Thank you so much Nitish. :)
Beautiful piece! Well said :)
Thank you ! :D
Agonizingly beautiful….I love the way you strewed the words together.. :-)
Thanks ! Writing after a long time. Feels good. :)